year 10 history GCSE student what do you think of this essay?

Georgie Asked: year 10 history GCSE student what do you think of this essay?

i'm a year 10 history student and i was wondering whether you could tell me what you think of my essy on "explain why women failed to gain the vote by 1914" sorry it's so long
thanks
Although today women have the equal right to vote, very few actually use the right to get involved in politics. However 90 years ago, many of our female ancestors struggled to gain female suffrage. By the time of 1914, they have dreaded over their continuous failures over their right to vote. The factors that led to their failures were complex and intricate, but by analyzing the main events and important figures in depth we will be able to see why women failed to gain the vote by 1914.
Women failed to get the right to vote in 1909 to 1914 because of many reasons of which include:
The suffragettes and the suffrage's, the suffrage's where to violent not law abiding meaning that they spent lots of time in and out of jail and this made the government think that they would be unable to think rationally. Whereas the suffragettes where to law abiding and too peaceful making the government and some of the higher class society think that they were weak minded and unable to think for themselves and therefore should not be allowed the vote.Another main social reason was that while both the suffragists and suffragettes wanted the same outcome, they used different methods to achieve their goal, and therefore their campaign was divided. The suffragists used moderate campaigning, but were overshadowed by the suffragettes, whose militant and violent approach made them be viewed as terrorists. For example, they smashed windows, chained themselves to railings and burned down buildings. Once arrested and in prison, they went on hunger strike. Men generally assumed that all women were suffragettes, and therefore the suffragists and their moderate ideas were ignored. Also, since there was no organization between the two groups, the overall campaign was weakened considerably.
The expectations of women. In the 1900s it was expected that women should stay at home and look after the family. Women didt have jobs and they had to sort out the home and have guests over to make their husbands seem high up and important and so that they could promote them and the business.
The influences of religion, religion where in favor of man and believed that women were inferior and that there job was to have children and look after the children. This meant that women were not allowed the vote because people were religious so they didt let women vote because as far as they were concerned women were inferior and unable to make up their minds about who to vote for.
Women were not as well educated as men so were subject to inferior jobs. Men believed women were not as intelligent as they were, and therefore wouldt understand about economics.
Queen Victoria who was very famous because of the British Empire she also stereotyped women. Traditional roles were cooking and cleaning, looking after the family or if women did manage to get a job outside the home it would be either a domestic servant or a nurse.
The main social reason was that most men had very entrenched views of women. They believed that the role of women was for them to be wives and mothers, and to work at home. This was justified by religion and believed to be God-given. Even the monarch at that time, Queen Victoria, agreed with that, and said that men were meant to protect women, as women were the weaker sex. It was also a common belief that women were less intelligent than men, and therefore wouldt understand the complexity of voting.

To conclude, women did not gain the right to vote between 1900 and 1914 for many reasons. These reasons can be grouped into social, political and economic. The social reasons were that men had entrenched views of women, the suffragists and suffragettes both had different approaches and tactics, and the Queen was not in favor of women gaining the vote. The political reasons were that the government was preoccupied dealing with other problems and that the government itself was divided, and the economic reason was that men believed women could not handle money.

sorry it's so long